this was a lot of fun to read, an interesting take on their relationship (and, I think, pretty close to the truth *wink wink*).
your writing, as usual, was excellent, I LOVED the way Jared and Jensen behaved around each other, it seemed so real, and all their dialogue - friendly, awkward, all of it! - was so realistic I could hear their voices in my head (not like THAT is uncommon for me, though, lol!).
I also really liked how you related Jared and Jensen's relationship to Sam and Dean's, all of the comparisons and contrasts between them were brilliant, and all the scenes they were in together really moved everything along so perfectly, it was great :D
um....
am I allowed to give criticism? if not, feel free to not read or delete this comment as you see fit, I know some people don't like it...
I think you might've fallen prey to something I call "J2 syndrome", which is when good writing gives way momentarily to "and then he/they fell in love!!" without proper explanation. don't get me wrong, I actually think the buildup in this story was excellent (way better than most J2 stories I've read), but in that scene where Jared's peeping on Jensen, it seems like allofasudden Jared's calling himself head-over-heels...I dunno, I'm kinda picky that way I guess, so take that comment as you may lol
also, it kinda squicked me that Jared is still with Sandy throughout this story, but that's because I LOVE Sandy and hate the idea of her getting hurt :( I mean, at least Jensen broke up with Stacy (or Clare, I got kinda confused by that actually...and was Kim the director the whole time?) before everything started, right? again, just me.
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Date: 2010-02-13 08:18 am (UTC)your writing, as usual, was excellent, I LOVED the way Jared and Jensen behaved around each other, it seemed so real, and all their dialogue - friendly, awkward, all of it! - was so realistic I could hear their voices in my head (not like THAT is uncommon for me, though, lol!).
I also really liked how you related Jared and Jensen's relationship to Sam and Dean's, all of the comparisons and contrasts between them were brilliant, and all the scenes they were in together really moved everything along so perfectly, it was great :D
um....
am I allowed to give criticism? if not, feel free to not read or delete this comment as you see fit, I know some people don't like it...
I think you might've fallen prey to something I call "J2 syndrome", which is when good writing gives way momentarily to "and then he/they fell in love!!" without proper explanation. don't get me wrong, I actually think the buildup in this story was excellent (way better than most J2 stories I've read), but in that scene where Jared's peeping on Jensen, it seems like allofasudden Jared's calling himself head-over-heels...I dunno, I'm kinda picky that way I guess, so take that comment as you may lol
also, it kinda squicked me that Jared is still with Sandy throughout this story, but that's because I LOVE Sandy and hate the idea of her getting hurt :( I mean, at least Jensen broke up with Stacy (or Clare, I got kinda confused by that actually...and was Kim the director the whole time?) before everything started, right? again, just me.
DON'T HATE ME, I LOVE YOU!!! D: D: